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Ecofriendly place: PICO DO JARÁGUA

Pico do Jarágua is located in São Paulo. It is a fascinating place to climb mountain and enjoy the nature. This Place is a good way to relax and meet friends. It is more than just a place to climb, it is also a good place to have some barbecue with friends or relatives, beside that you can do activities such as hiking, physical activities, to play games in sports court and take a rest on green area.
There is an absolutely fantastic park to children, free parking, easy access going by public transport and what I love are the animals crossing the path while you go up the mountain. It is by far the highest mountain around the city.
The atmosphere is excellent due to be proximity of nature, and it is also considerate a familiar place to do a picnic on the top with an incredible sight. I have visited the Pico do Jaragua whatever I can, and I still love it. Do not miss it.

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Pico do Jaraguá is located in São Paulo. It is a fascinating place to climb a mountain and enjoy nature.



This Place is a good way to relax and meet friends. It is more than just a place to climb; it is also a good place to have some barbecue with friends or relatives. Besides that, you can do physical activities such as hiking, playing games in sports court and take a rest on the green area.


There is an absolutely fantastic park for children. There is also a free parking with easy access by public transport.

What I love are the animals crossing the path while you go up the mountain. It is by far the highest mountain around the city.


The atmosphere is excellent due to the proximity to nature, and it is also considered a familiar place to go on a picnic on the top with an incredible sight. I visit (use o presente simple você está falando de uma rotina, hábito ) the Pico do Jaraguá whatever I can, and I still love it. Do not miss it.

Collocations com o substantivo picnic:

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consider (verbo): considerar

considerate (adjetivo): atento, atencioso.

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