Correção Writing - Question 2 Toefl IBT

Pessoal, gostaria muito de uma ajuda de vocês na correção do meu texto abaixo, que foi proposto na sessão Writing - Question 2.

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.


In my opinion the majority of the parents shouldn’t be consider the best teachers. I know that they play the most important role in growing process of their child, but it doesn’t mean that they can always provide the right lessons for their sun. It is expected that parents teach moral and ethic lessons, which is the most important lesson for a person who lives in a society, but they are not able to teach the whole educational backgroung that a person should learn.
Parents represents, in most of the case, the main influence person for their child, that’s why is so important that they act in a right way, respecting the laws and the others. Many childrens grow up seen what their parents do and start to behave like them. Even though, they can’t be responsable for the caracther of their sun. That’s when it comes the importance of education, offerer in schools.
Since the beginning of the growing process is important to put our sun in the School, because this is the place where they will learn different skills from a person who is prepared and who have studied for be in this position, which is the Professor. Parets can’t subistitute teachers, because they are not able to provide all the cultural and educational requirements that a person should have, otherwise the wouldn’t be able to decide what carrer they want to follow and to persue that.
Finally, i really think we should separate the figure of parents and teachers, thought they play a important role in the learning process of a person. Parents will always share their believes and experience with their sun, but they have much more things to learn, which will be provide for their professors.