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Is it better to enjoy your money when you earn it or is it better to save your money for some time in the future? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Generally speaking, I think that it is better to save your money for a necessity in a future. Indeed, when you earn your salary, one thing that you want more to do is spend in something you like. However, if you spend all the earned money you won’t have a security for improvises that happen in your live.
First of all, save money is one of the most important things to do for live quietly. If you have little amount of money saved, you will be more relaxed when a problem comes. Just because you get prepared before, you won’t need to preoccupied with the spend money. Among this, many things can happen, like accidents or improvises. You may think that it will not occur in your live, but if it does, you’ll regret for do not save money.
Second, if you have a kid it is important to save money for his university. Many of the universities are private, so if you want enter in the college you need to have lots of money. Today, it is normal the parents doing that, because the son or daughter needs to go to college and they pay everything to him or her.
Third, just save money is not the only thing to do if you want to be safe. One other option is invest your money. It is a good example of how saving money the people who goes to a bank and guard your ‘’dollars’’ for a period and every month the bank gives a percent of the total money. For example, one person that is saving a million of dollars in a bank receives in end of the month, a hundred thousands of dollars.
For conclusion, save money only bring us good consequences. In addition, you can save to buy things that you need, like a car for example. Instead, if you are an uncontrollable people, you will not have any money when a surprise comes and you will have to sell your belongings. On the other hand, if you are saving money, you can live safety.
Is it better to enjoy your money when you earn it or is it better to save your money for some time in the future? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Generally speaking, I think that it is better to save your money for a necessity in a future. Indeed, when you earn your salary, one thing that you want more to do is spend in something you like. However, if you spend all the earned money you won’t have a security for improvises that happen in your live.
First of all, save money is one of the most important things to do for live quietly. If you have little amount of money saved, you will be more relaxed when a problem comes. Just because you get prepared before, you won’t need to preoccupied with the spend money. Among this, many things can happen, like accidents or improvises. You may think that it will not occur in your live, but if it does, you’ll regret for do not save money.
Second, if you have a kid it is important to save money for his university. Many of the universities are private, so if you want enter in the college you need to have lots of money. Today, it is normal the parents doing that, because the son or daughter needs to go to college and they pay everything to him or her.
Third, just save money is not the only thing to do if you want to be safe. One other option is invest your money. It is a good example of how saving money the people who goes to a bank and guard your ‘’dollars’’ for a period and every month the bank gives a percent of the total money. For example, one person that is saving a million of dollars in a bank receives in end of the month, a hundred thousands of dollars.
For conclusion, save money only bring us good consequences. In addition, you can save to buy things that you need, like a car for example. Instead, if you are an uncontrollable people, you will not have any money when a surprise comes and you will have to sell your belongings. On the other hand, if you are saving money, you can live safety.
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