Correção de texto: Redação

Estou no nível intermediário no curso de inglês, mas quero fazer o TOEFL. Minha professora passou uma redação onde o tema foi um pouco difícil para mim. Gostaria de compartilhar com vocês e saber suas respectivas opiniões. Abraços.

Tema: "Many Families have importante traditions that family members share.What is one of your family's important traditions?
Use specific reasons and details to support your response."

Redação:

A long time ago we can see wich exist different traditions to different families, because each family have a different culture than other family. In Morocco for example the families traditions are so differents to the brazilian families.
There in Morroco for example only the mother and father choose the spouse for their son. Sometimes the grooms know each other only on wedding day, it's totally abnormal in Brazil, because here they can choose their future spouse.
Exist families wich have a particular traditions like the religion,food, dress and many others.
Some families have religion traditions , and they need to salve the saturday for their religion, they can't work, because they believe it's disrepect with their religion.
Some Families have an important traditions wich the members in the family need to follow because it was shared generation by generation, and the other families have a little traditions, but is not a very important, and the members can follow or not.
In my family for example we have a tradition to celebrate the important dates together, like birthdays, Christmas, Reveillon.
The last important date was my father's birthday, we can put togheter the members of my family and celebrate more one year with my father, we can talk about the family's project.
In my opnion, we have to respect each tradition family, because is some important to the members because some family share this by many years.