Correção do dialogo "taylor and lisa..." [en>en]

Estava praticando inglês e gostaria que voês corrigissem este diálogo. Obrigada!

Lisa: Hello?
Taylor: Can I talk to Lisa?
Lisa:This is me.
Taylor: Oh! Hi, Lisa! It´s Taylor! I need your help!
Lisa: Ok! What is the problem now?
Taylor: I´m in love with Jane. But I think she doesn´t like me, and I don´t know what to do!
Lisa: why don´t you try to talk to her?
Taylor: Oh! I could not do it, ´cause I´m very timid. And, is she your best friend, doesn´t she?
Lisa: Of course she is!
Taylor: So, you could talk about me to her.
Lisa: Oh! I don´t know, my friend, but I get a better idea.
Taylor: That´s much good! I knew that I could count on you!
Lisa: Next week, I and Jane will go to the beach. And, I think that you could meet each other at there.
Taylor: Oh, great! But do you go by bus or by car?
Lisa: I´ll go by car.
Taylor: And can I go with you?
Lisa: Sure!
Taylor: So, we´re agreed! Thank you, Lisa!